Friday Fictioneers again! It’s been an exhausting summer – I’ve missed writing these stories, and reading the stories by other Fictioneers.
Ghost Stories
“Out of marshmallows.” The kids protested. He couldn’t see faces around the campfire, but he knew the voices.
“We’ll get more tomorrow. Right now, let’s tell stories, then bed. I’ll start. One night, three kids were camping in the woods. It got dark, and their dad said ‘Time for bed!’ And they said ‘No!’ ‘No!’ ‘No!’ ‘No!’. Well, their dad could count right up to four. So he said -”
“Dad,” sighed Norah, “is this a ghost story? Because they’re dumb.”
“Yeah. Wanna go to bed now.”
“Me too. Because there’s no ghosts.”
Kids bedded down, he stared glumly into the flames. Got to stay awake till the fire’s out.
Thin – bony thin – fingers clutched his shoulder. A voice moaned, “It’s cold. So cold. Let me join you?”
Please let me know what you think!
It is always the end of a ghost story that makes it so good.
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Hahaha he’s scared himself silly!
Yes…or HAS he?
I think he wants to be scared. There can be a lot of fun in that when it’s shared! I like the bony fingers at the end. I’m spooked.
But the kids won’t share being scared with him, and he doesn’t know we’re watching. Poor guy, all alone – until he isn’t.
Glad you like the fingers! Does he?? (After all, he’s getting what he wanted, right?)
ooh..that was so spooky! very nicely written 🙂
Thank you! “Spooky” is what I was trying for – it’s nice to hear that I succeeded. 🙂
Stoke up the fire!!
janet
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Dear Sharon,
It seems that the kids should’ve waited around for the real ghost story. 😉
Nice to see you here.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I wonder what the kids will find in the morning?
Nice to be back here at last. And I think I’m a week late, but happy birthday!
Not quite a week. And I plan to celebrate for the whole month. So you’re not late at all. 😉 Thank you.
CREEPY ALERT! But, very well done – excellent in fact! I love to camp and always have. However, next time, if the kids want to stay up all night – they can keep me company (not the bony fingers)!
Great story! Nan 🙂
Thank you so much! And don’t forget – the days are getting shorter and shorter, and it’s less than a month till Hallowe’en…….
Sharon, It’s a good thing the kids didn’t see the ghost. They would’ve never gone to sleep. I guess a ghost would feel cold, but I doubt the fire will help warm him. Well written. 🙂 —Susan
Thank you! Good point about the kids, and very good point about the ghost not feeling any warmer from sitting near the campfire, or snuggling up to the hapless father, or anything else.
Poor ghost.