Friday Fictioneers – Full Fathom Five

This week’s Friday Fictioneers Foto was a challenge – I knew at first sight what sort of mood I wanted to try for, but how to build a story around that feeling? Here’s my hundred word story at last – please let me know what you think of it! And as always, many thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, our valiant cat herder!

kent-bonhamFull Fathom Five

I still have photos from that vacation. Want to see the hotel? Gorgeous, right? An old place with creaky elevators and small rooms and ancient plumbing, but so much charm. Like living in a coral reef. We had a great time – I learned to paddleboard, and Jim spent every day on that little boat he rented.

He was out on the bay when all the water pulled back from the land. I was staring, trying to understand, when one of the locals grabbed my arm and dragged me inland, uphill, just ahead of that mountain of water.

Jim? I tell myself he’s still out there enjoying his boat.

* * *

(By the way – I’ve never been anywhere near the real building in the photo, and as far as I know it’s completely up to date inside πŸ˜‰ )

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20 responses to “Friday Fictioneers – Full Fathom Five

  1. 😦 I do like the way she’s trying to cope with his death.

    janet

  2. I can’t even imagine…

  3. A coral reef – of course! thanks goodness she lived to tell the story!

  4. Love the fact that you know about the building and that your flash started there and took us somewhere else, so much story in so few words!

    • Thank you! One of the things I love about Friday Fictioneers is that we have to train ourselves to cut away everything that doesn’t contribute to telling the story – I think I’m getting better at it, though my first draft is always WAY over a hundred words!

      • It takes practise, Friday Fictioneers was my first meeting with Flash Fiction, sometimes I freewrite and manage 100 words with a mild rejigging edit, other times, like this week I write 1000 words and whittle it down!

  5. What an ominous twist. When the water pulled back from the shore, I knew what was coming. Poor Jim.

  6. A good story full of emotions in few words.

  7. Dear Sharon,
    Wow. You packed a punch this week. Well done.
    Shalom,
    The Cat Herder

  8. I found the way she chose to deal with probable Jim’s death really touching.

  9. a horrifying experience.. i loved the ending.. it suggests that she had somehow found a way to accept things and cope. great story πŸ™‚

    • Yes – the kind of day that changes you forever. Thank you – I’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚ Her way of coping may be kind of fragile since it depends on convincing herself of a fantasy, but we all do the best we can.

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