I haven’t participated in the 100 Word Challenge for a week or two. Time to get back on track! This week, Julia asks us to add 100 words to the prompt “…the notes from the piano…” to make a very small story. Hmmm. Where is that piano? Who’s playing it – and what kind of music are they playing? Here’s my answer – please let me know what you think!
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The notes from the piano in the studio downstairs drifted through the floor. Sounds charming, right? Well, no. Scales, G to G, drifted through the floor. Over and over, up and down. And every time, the same wrong note. I burrowed into the pillows, coughed some more, and tried to sleep.
Finally the hour’s lesson was over. Blessed silence. No – footsteps stomping up the old stairs. A fist banging on my door. I pulled on a robe and staggered out to answer.
“Look, I’ve been hearing you cough all afternoon. Are you – no, I can see you’re not okay. Do you need help? What can I get you?”
Ha! Brilliant ending as always….and the beginning and middle were good too.
Not my ending but its your story. Liked the writing:)
Thank you!
Nice the coughing bothered the piano player.
I figured if the narrator could hear the piano, the piano teacher could hear the coughing
Yes and why the narrator was so annoyed. She needed the rest.
Of course! very clever and a nice generous ending.
Thank you, Gilly – the poor narrator just didn’t have the energy to face somebody complaining, so I gave her some help instead
Great story, I like your unexpected ending – both from my point of view and that of the narrator!
Thank you! To be honest, at first it was going to end with a nasty confrontation with the piano teacher, but I decided that ending was too predictable (and besides, this version took fewer words to describe
). Also, I seem to be in a “happy endings” mood with my poor characters at the moment.
That is very, very funny! Tables turned!
I don’t think the narrator has enough energy at this point to consider whether or not she’s bothering other people. Glad you like it!
very clever Sharon
Thanks, Jo!